This one is spot on. Maybe the little girls arms are a tad thick, but I dunno if I'd mess with it. The gesture of the characters and colors is great.
Darth Brooks wrote:
For this one, the neck area looks off. I'd add a line to define the bottom portion of her jaw as it comes into where her chin is. I think here brow/forehead is a bit high as proportioned to the rest of her head/body.
The book is at an angle that makes it look like she's not actually reading it - it's facing off to her right somewhere and the left cover appears to not be open wide enough.
Something bothers me about her right forearm/hand position. You can't see her forearm, but in proportion to how her shoulder, arm, and hand are located in regard to it resting on her knee. It looks like her right hand is too far out for where it should be.
After looking at it again, the right leg seems off as well, like it's in the wrong perspective - like the knee is too far away from her body. That might be adding to the effect of the right arm/hand looking off.
I'd see if I could get someone to sit in that actual position and either do some quick sketches or even better, take a bunch of pictures. It's a super tough pose, so I completely applaud you for even attempting it.
You've got some decent rendering and I love the leaves in the tree.
Darth Brooks wrote:
In think all and all they both are excellent efforts. Keep it up.